Feedback from Dr. Fleur

I've received a written feedback on my draft proposal from Dr. Fleur on 6/04/05. She is my lecturer for Thesis Writing 1 class. She said that I've done a "well-written, engaging proposal". Thank you Fleur. But there are a few corrections though.

Areas for improvement:

1. tendency to place in-text citation at the end of sentence/ paragraph,
2. all statements needed academic support,
3. ethics clearance for human subjects after approval of proposal,
4. some clarification required for methods esp. questionaires and focus group, and
5. the use of font (serif) required for UniSA proposals and theses.